A Living Document with Dead Ideals
by Sam Ackerman
Lens Paper | UWS 8b The American Dream | Jared Berkowitz | Fall 2019
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To the Founding Fathers, the United States of America was to be a country like none that came before it. It would be a country built on tenets of the Enlightenment in Europe, whether they be political or philosophical in nature. It was to be a country that would lead the way to its tenets in their time and beyond. However, the Founding Fathers were purposefully ignorant of a key element of the Enlightenment: equality. While the idea is displayed prominently in the document and documents which came before it, the Constitution does a poor job of securing freedom for all. Through Friedrich Engels and Karl Marx’s The Communist Manifesto, it is possible to view the Constitution in this light. Even in the optimistic The American Constitution: A Graphic Adaptation by Johnathan Hennessey, the document is portrayed as securing freedom for the rich, and when viewed through the lens of Marx and Engels, more inequalities are exposed. The Constitution is a document written in a time without the same ideals as those of modernity. While in the past it was a document of relative equality, today the public may look at it as a document of pure inequality. The Constitution actively opposes the American Dream as it destroys equal opportunity by protecting those who have property, and by actively propelling the bourgeoisie up in social status while restricting the powers of the proletariat. The Constitution, as seen by Marxism, is a document made by the bourgeoisie for the bourgeoisie, and it therefore prevents the American Dream from being realized.
According to Marx, around the turn of the nineteenth century came the epoch of modern capitalism. This corresponds to the industrial revolution and societal changes due to the Napoleonic wars. The first event changed labor relations with machinery and the second with widespread ideas of liberalism. This was a time of large social change and a shift away from feudalism, and Marx describes it himself as a time of “simplified class antagonism” (Engels and Marx 63). By this he means that the class struggle known throughout time has become much less complicated in terms of classes. In this epoch of capitalism there are “two great classes directly facing each other—bourgeoisie and proletariat” (Engels and Marx 63). These two classes are all that is left over from previous class antagonisms, and are the second-to-last step in the progress of society throughout history. The final step is the condensation of all peoples into one single class, effectively removing the conception of class from human society altogether. However, before this is able to occur, the proletariat, a large class of poor workers, must overthrow the ruling bourgeoisie class, a small class of powerful land-owning elites. According to Marx, in every capitalist society, that is to say the most advanced societies in his time, this simple class struggle exists. Every day the proletariat grows in numbers, while the bourgeoisie shrinks. Even still, the bourgeoisie hold on to power through their ownership of means of production and extravagant wealth. Since this holds true in every capitalist nation, the United States has always had this class struggle as it has always been a capitalist nation. It is an odd case because slavery existed and arguably created a third class, but because the institution parallels Marx’s conception of wage labor, in his terms slaves are members of the proletariat. Marx defines wage labor as the “quantum of the means of subsistence which is absolutely requisite to keep the laborer in bare existence as a laborer” (Engels and Marx 84). This description aptly describes conditions of slaves in terms of the material relation between them and their masters and is a direct corollary to actual wage labor that occurred in the United States at the time of slavery and after the Emancipation Proclamation. To Marx the class division in the United States could not be more pronounced.
To see why Marx would have believed this inequity between bourgeoisie and proletariat has persisted in America in the forms of slavery, wage labor, and class division, one must first look to the Framers of the Constitution. The Constitution is the supreme law of the land, and by considering the views of its authors, a greater narrative of its purpose can be construed. To understand this, the analysis must go back to the catalyst of constitutional thought, the Revolutionary War. Most causes of the war were taxes such as the “passage of … the 1765 Stamp Act” (Hennessey 12). This act only affected the bourgeoisie as they were the only ones who could afford products this tax effected. This bourgeois issue was marketed to the proletariat as an issue of representation, but even with representation the conflict sparked war. After the war, the newly independent states had to organize a government. Originally they adopted the Articles of Confederation. This document had many flaws for all people, but “the big problem was power” (Hennessey 18). The central government had no power over the squabbling states. Both proletariat and bourgeoisie had their ideas on how to fix this, yet it was the bourgeoisie who got the privilege of doing so. The Framers committed treason against the Articles of Confederation. Instead of only fixing its flaws, which was the task they were assigned to do, they created a whole new document. In other words the Framers performed a coup on the old regime. With their new document they set up a system of governing that favored the bourgeoisie class. This is extremely evident in the classes they left out of governing, being the poor, non-whites, and women. The war that started the lengthy process of creating the Constitution had begun because of a lack representation, and after all was said and done these groups, most notably the proletariat, still had no representation. To Marx the true goals of the bourgeoisie are blatant at this point. The most notable of these is the protection of bourgeoisie property and businesses; in the first Article the Framers gave the federal government “the authority to ‘regulate commerce’ between states and foreign countries” (Hennessey 42). The commerce clause is included here in the first Article as it is what was on the top of the Framers’ list of priorities. The Constitution, in its raw form, is a document protecting the bourgeoisie while keeping a status quo with the rights and representation of the proletariat.
Another aspect of the Constitution that Marx would have believed elevates bourgeois power within the institutions of government is the implementation of a representative republic, as this is not a guarantee of democracy. Democracy is a tool of the proletariat as democratization increases their power as they are the majority. However, there is not a single mention of democracy in the entire Constitution. Rather there is only mention of the word republic. Staying true to the Constitution, the following government initially only represented the bourgeoisie. It was not one of equality or democracy, but rather it was a republic that represented one class and its interests. Voting, for instance, was not an important enough issue for the Framers, and they passed the task onto the states. For most states, land ownership was a voting requirement, and “Rhode Island was the last state to get rid of the … restriction, in 1888” (Hennessey 32). The new government was “not a democracy [but] a republic” (Hennessey 28), precisely because the Framers did not trust the common man. This issue was exacerbated when the bourgeoisie was granted more power by the “three-fifths” compromise, which stated that “each slave would be counted as three-fifths … of a free man” (Hennessey 31). Slaves were not citizens and therefore could not vote. Their vote went to the slave owners instead. Owning capital was a way to increase your voting power. If you controlled labor through the form of slaves, you could acquire more influence in government. If all that was said before was not enough to warrant the accusation that representation was a scheme to elevate the bourgeoisie, the three-fifths compromise is the most damning evidence in proving such an accusation true. The bourgeoisie were represented whilst the proletariat was left at the whims of their decisions.
Some may argue that because the republic is representative, the representatives align their votes with the majority of their constituency. Marx sees through the façade of this institution of representation as one of oppressive bourgeoisie representatives ruling the proletariat masses. This system that the Framers set up favored the bourgeoisie as candidates for representative positions. The people are “governed by [these] elected representatives” (Hennessey 28) and while this seems democratic to most, the truth is that voting for representatives is an extremely undemocratic system. In order to run for any position, a candidate must show that he has legitimacy to be in that position. This is done through merit. This seems straightforward and uncontroversial at first glance, but then the implications of legitimacy and merit appear. To have merit, one must have been in a political position, and in turn that candidate must have some idea of what they are doing. In order for that to occur, they need schooling. There is no naturally politically charismatic and confident candidate. Even today, most people’s first qualification is the education they got. Back in the times of the Framers, education was much more exclusive than it is now, and still the average working class person cannot afford an expensive education. They are wage laborers that work to pay for daily life, and they cannot simply take a four-year break for higher education. Therefore the rich bourgeoisie stepped in and became political figures for not just the bourgeoisie, but also the proletariat. Holding office was inherently a position that went to the bourgeoisie. The proletariat for most of its history could not vote in a candidate that represented them. The closest to proletarians in office are state government representatives elected in rural counties, and, more impressively the farmer-turned-President Jimmy Carter, who earned his BS at the US Naval Academy. The meritocratic system that the Framers set up has kept the proletariat out of policy making and has soured the taste the American people have for proletariat candidates. This is a reason that “in the modern representative state, [the bourgeoisie have] exclusive political sway” (Engels and Marx 66).
To Marx it is not just office that was created with a bourgeoisie bias, but also many other functions of government. It has been established that the Framers did not trust the every man, and so they put in guarantees that would keep the bourgeoisie in control. One prime example of this bias is the institution of the Electoral College. When the people of the United States of America vote for their president, they are not voting for the president, but rather they “vote for electors, who then choose the president” (Hennessey 55). This in itself shows the distrust that the Framers saw in the proletariat. The way electors were chosen was up to the states originally and the method was not always streamlined. In some states, “electors were picked by the people, in others, by the state legislators” (Hennessey 55). Today the position is normally “given to active and highly regarded members of political parties” (Hennessey 55). The electorate is therefore a barrier of direct election of the president. The position of the highest member in the Executive Branch is chosen by an elite electorate. These elites can and have voted against what their constituency has voted for and have done so as recently as 2016. If Marx’s vision of a mass class awakening of the proletariat were to happen and the proletariat decide to start a democratic revolution by voting in communist candidates, the established parties would use the Electoral College to vote against the interests of the proletariat and in favor of bourgeoisie interests.
There have been small proletariat victories despite the constant domination of the bourgeoisie, for example the expansion of suffrage to more groups in the form of Amendments. The “14th Amendment … states that U.S. citizenship is a birthright” (Hennessey 122), and the 15th Amendment “bestowed full voting rights on all men, regardless of race [or] color” (Hennessey 124). Later the 17th amendment created direct election of senators, the 19th gave women the right to vote, and the 26th lowered the minimum voting age to 18 years old. All of these have to do with the issues of citizenship and voting, both of which are extremely important when it comes to the functions of government. Citizens receive benefits from the government, and those who vote can have a say in what those benefits are. Amendments may seem to be the way to close the gap between proletariat and bourgeoisie, however they are extremely rare. It took these amendments too long to be ratified by enough states to make them law. Women could not vote until 131 years after the republic was founded. The system is too slow because it requires either “a yes vote [on an amendment] from 3/4ths of [state legislatures]” or “special conventions of the people in all the states, … [and] again it would take 3/4ths of the states to approve” (Hennessey 80-81). This supermajority is extremely high and must begin with a proposal being approved by a vote of at least 2/3rds from both houses of Congress. The process was made to be slow and inefficient in bringing about change, and as of now the special conventions of the people have never been successful. All change has been in the hands of the elected elite, and that is why it has been so slow to adopt new ideas. It creates an issue where moderate additions are seen as radical. For example the Equal Rights Amendment has never been ratified, and has been tossed around ever since the 1920s. While it is common sense to the proletariat to ratify this amendment, the bourgeoisie have argued the notion that it is not needed due to the implication of other laws and that has kept it out of the Constitution. This is an idea that would protect the interests of the proletariat as it protects many groups within the proletariat population from discrimination. This is a bourgeoisie plot as they can discriminate against a group, such as when they pay women lower wages, and they will fight to keep that ability by keeping progressive ideas out of the Constitution.
A much better way to fight for proletariat interests is through the courts and Judicial Review. It is a power that was not stated explicitly in the Constitution and is therefore not an institution the Framers created, as the main purpose of the courts shifted from their initial vision. The process of Judicial Review has allowed “landmark Supreme Court cases [to] shape … our laws and government” (Hennessey 72). These cases include Brown v. Board of Education which declared that “in the field of public education the doctrine of ‘separate but equal’ has no place” (Hennessey 133). Most social progress occurs through the courts. Groups such as the ACLU have the collective legal power to fight for proletariat interests. Without the courts many civil rights would not exist. Desegregation, legal homosexuality, secular schools, and criminal rights may never have been written into law. All of these rights have been fought by the proletariat for the proletariat. To Marx this is a mini-class awakening, with proletarians pushing back against the bourgeoisie. It is much faster and more effective for the proletariat to use the court system to secure rights and equity rather than to hope that the bourgeoisie will benevolently pass an amendment. The only flaw in the system is the Supreme Court decides which cases they hear. Despite the fact, more landmark cases have influenced an increase in power for the proletariat than all of the amendments ratified after the Bill of Rights. The system is not perfect, but for the time being the courts are the best tool of the proletariat in influencing the bourgeoisie government that rules them, as other than that the proletariat would have to play “a revolutionary part” (Engels and Marx 66) in order to secure rights. However, the courts are a bloodless way to achieve parts of the whole proletariat goal.
The government, while still under the control of the bourgeoisie, has gradually granted more rights and representation to the proletariat. Despite this, the governing document that guides the country heavily favors the bourgeoisie. This bias can be tracked all the way back to the Framers who made the Constitution for their own bourgeois purposes. With the assistance of Marx, one can deduce that equity was never a goal of the Framers, and that decision is a prime cause for inequity in modern times. Without equity, the idea of equality in the American Dream can never be realized, and therefore has only been able to exist in the realm of idealism.
Works Cited
Engels, Friedrich and Karl Marx. The Communist Manifesto. Penguin, 1998.
Hennessey, Johnathan, art by Aaron McConnell. The United States Constitution: A Graphic Adaptation. Hill and Wang, 2008.
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The Lens Essay
Now that you have a solid grounding in the analytical technique of close reading, we can apply that knowledge to other texts. For the primary text of the lens essay we will read the graphic novel: The United States Constitution: A Graphic Adaptation by Jonathan Hennessey and Aaron McConnell. This work depicts the framing of the constitution and subsequent debates over ratification and the bill of rights. For the lens texts, you will choose excerpts from either Karl Marx and Friedrich Engels’ The Communist Manifesto (1848) or Frederick Douglass’ oration, “What to the Slave is the Fourth of July” delivered on July 5, 1852. These documents each wrestle with ideas of liberty, equality, and democracy while reaching different conclusions. For Marx and Engels capitalist democratic systems “sow the seeds” of their own destruction through inevitable class conflict leading to revolution, and eventually socialism. Frederick Douglass’ oration assesses what the promise of America might hold, if anything, for the slave and/or the free African-American.
For this essay make an argument about how either Douglass or Marx and Engels complicate and challenge the graphic novels’ presumptions about the American Dream. Some elements to consider are:
For Marx/Engels:
- What is the relationship between equality and the American Dream? Does the conception of class and the inevitability of class conflict, developed by M/E frustrate the promises of the Founders?
- How does the United States Constitution deepen or resolve class conflict?
- What social classes appear to be emerging (or have emerged) in the U.S as a consequence of this new constitutional order?
For Douglass:
- What does the Constitution promise for the slave? Is Douglass’ assessment one of tragedy or optimism, i.e. hope?
- What strikes you about the tone of Douglass’ oration? How does the Constitution, as portrayed by the graphic novel, work against Douglass’ argument? Or does it support Douglass?
- Was the Constitution designed to establish egalitarian democracy? What ideas developed by Douglass and portrayed by the novel support or refute this? Do you see a correlation between democratic governance and the American Dream?
Essay length: 7-8 pages
The first draft of the essay will be due in class and on LATTE by Sept. 28 at 5p. Final Drafts will be due on Oct. 8 by 12 noon. Essays must use 1-inch margins and 12 point Times New Roman font. Do not enlarge your punctuation. Essays must have a title, be double-spaced and have page numbers.
This assignment presents you with a number of new challenges:
- You will be transferring your close reading skills from one text to another.
- The writings of Marx and Douglass are accessible yet complex. As such, it is essential that you exercise patience and learn how to make sense of them effectively. Part of your task for this paper is to let your readers know what Marx or Douglass are saying and why. Assess their motives, arguments, and effectiveness.
- You will be offering an interpretation of The United States Constitution informed by either a Marxian-socialist analysis or democratic republican theory that will help you investigate what the text has to say, how it constructs its meanings, and what the implications of those meanings are. As a result, you will be able to reflect back on philosophical ideas with a refined and even critical perspective.
Goals
- Open with an engaging introduction that makes your motive clear. Recall Gordon Harvey’s description of motive as “the intellectual context that you establish for your topic and thesis at the start of your essay, in order to suggest why someone besides your instructor might want to read an essay on this topic or need to hear your particular thesis argued—why your thesis isn’t just obvious to all, why other people might hold other theses that you think are wrong.” Ask of your thesis, “So what? Why would someone care? What’s unexpected here? How is this interesting?” until you can respond with a satisfying answer. The answer will lead you to your motive.
- Create a dialogue between two texts. Don’t settle for a baseline reading of symmetrical points between primary and lens texts. Instead, devise a thesis that identifies how (and how well) these texts complicate your understanding of the American Dream. You will also want to identify a “twist,” a place where your case and the lens don’t match up. This is your opportunity to revise, refine, or even critique the lens—you need not agree wholeheartedly but explain why you disagree and examine the merits and faults of the arguments. You are being asked to interpret the story and reflect on your lens. As always, close readings of specific passages are required to support and/or complicate your argument.
- Grapple with the theory’s central ideas, rather than taking isolated passages out of context to support your ideas. Whenever you are called on to bring a critical text into an assignment, your essay will not only be judged on the merit of your original ideas but also on how accurately you represent and make use of the critical text. Even when you disagree with the author, you must explain why you disagree, and that requires you to fully understand the author’s position. When you refer to Marx or Douglass, be sure you engage with their main ideas and not a side detail of those ideas.
- Document quotations using MLA in-text citation method. This citation method requires that you cite your sources parenthetically in text.
Pre-Draft 2.1: Understanding the Lens for Marx and Douglass
One method that will clarify challenging texts like Karl Marx’s Communist Manifesto and Frederick Douglass’ “What to the Slave is the Fourth of July,” is called “reverse outlining.” To do this, you create an outline that maps out the ideas of Marx and Douglass by using the format below. A reverse outline forces you to boil that text down to its constituent ideas, decide for yourself which ideas are the most important, and arrange those ideas in an organized hierarchy. Once you have actively read and marked up the essay, produce one reverse outline for Marx and another for Douglass. Use the following format for your outline, define the concepts and answer the questions in your own words. In addition, cite the page number(s) on which you find your evidence.
Marx and Engels:
- Communism (define this)
- Class Struggle
- Bourgeois
- Proletarians
- According to Marx, why is class struggle/conflict inevitable?
- What are the stages of history according to Marx
- How are the communists distinct from the proletarians?
- What is the problem with capitalism?
- What is the solution?
- What is socialism?
- What are the different strands of socialism Marx analyzes?
- Do you agree? Why? Why not? Was Marx right?
Douglass:
- What is the date of the document? Who is the audience? What is the tone?
- Declaration of Independence: (meaning for Douglass)
- What is “democracy” for Douglass?
- What is the role of religion in the new republic?
- How does Douglass use religion to attack the institution of slavery?
- What to the “citizen” is the Fourth of July?
- What to the Slave is the Fourth of July?
- The Constitution: how does Douglass assess the constitution?
- What is does the constitution protect according to Douglass?
PRE-DRAFT 2.1 DUE SUNDAY SEP. 13 AT 5P VIA LATTE
Pre-Draft 2.2: Mini Lens Analysis
Lens analysis asks you to put two or more texts in conversation in order to produce a reading that you couldn’t have made through close reading alone. After analyzing and considering The Communist Manifesto and “What to the Slave is the Fourth of July” in relation to “The United States Constitution” in detail, choose one chapter from the graphic novel for Marx and another for Douglass. Next:
- Using the first chapter, make a mini-argument (two paragraphs) using Marx’s notion of class struggle to complicate the American Dream. Be sure to cite at least one piece of from the chapter in your analysis. This exercise offers a microcosm of the lens essay, and you should be able to use your reading for this pre-draft in the final essay.
- Using the second chapter, make am mini-argument (two paragraphs) using Douglass’s concept of freedom complicate the American Dream. Be sure to cite at least one clause or article. This exercise offers a microcosm of the lens essay, and you should be able to use your reading for this pre-draft in the final essay.
PRE-DRAFT 2.2 DUE ON WED. SEPT. 16 AT 12P
SUBMIT VIA LATTE
Pre-draft 2.3: Outline for Rough Draft
A comprehensive outline will ensure that your paper has a logical structure and evidence that is relevant to your argument. Each paragraph should have a separate claim that supports the thesis, as well as evidence and analysis. In order to organize your paragraphs you will have to select and analyze quotations. The argument should develop as the paper unfolds. In other words, paragraphs should not be interchangeable. The outline should follow the format below:
- Introduction
- Paragraph #1 (Lens paragraph)
- Topic Sentence: This should summarize the main idea of the paragraph What is Utilitarianism
- Evidence: include the quotation and the page numbers for each idea about Utilitarianism that is relevant to your paper (you will need 2-3 quotations)
- Analysis: briefly explain in you own words what you’ve quoted
- Relevance: a brief statement of how the evidence relates to your thesis
- Paragraph #2 (Evidence)
- Topic Sentence: This should summarize the main idea of the paragraphs
- Contextualization: When you cite your evidence, what is happening in the episode?
- Evidence: include the quotation (use just one quotation)
- Analysis: brief statement of how you will close read the evidence
- Relevance: a brief statement of how the evidence relates to your thesis
- Paragraph #3 (Evidence)
- Topic Sentence: This should summarize the main idea of the paragraph
- Contextualization: When you cite your evidence, what is happening in the episode?
- Evidence: include the quotation (use just one quotation) or describe the moment you’ll be analyzing if no dialogue
- Analysis: brief statement of how you will close read the evidence.
- Relevance: a brief statement of how the evidence relates to your thesis.
Etc… for ALL of the body paragraphs. You should have a minimum of seven body paragraphs. The remaining four paragraphs should either provide evidence to support your thesis or a counter-argument (no more than one counter-argument). Evidence should be organized from weakest to strongest.
Final paragraph: Conclusion—what are the larger implications of your argument? How does the text comment on a broader theme than just your specific claims?
OUTLINES ARE DUE BY 12 NOON SEPT. 24 ON LATTE
Write Now! editor Doug Kirshen spoke with Samual Ackerman and his UWS instructor, Jared Berkowitz, about Sam's paper.
Write Now! editor Doug Kirshen spoke with Samual Ackerman and his UWS instructor, Jared Berkowitz, about Sam's paper.
Doug Kirshen: Sam, let me start with you. Tell us about the topics. What were your choices and why did you choose what you wrote about?
Samuel Ackerman: In this class we were looking at conceptions of American ideals through different lens points, mostly through leftist ones, such as in this assignment, Marxism. So we had to read [Friedrich Engels and] Karl Marx's Communist Manifesto. First time I ever read it. I had not read any leftist theory, any political theory at all up to this point. We had to use Marx to analyze the Constitution, essentially to see whether, through this viewpoint, this is a good or bad document. Does it support and reinforce the American Dream or does it tell us that the American Dream is a fraud, not real. And so I remember reading it and coming to the conclusion that Marx would never have thought that this was a document that fulfills the ideals that would achieve the American dream. So I wrote about that, and a few classmates of mine wrote the counterpoint. And so it was just very interesting because I'm pretty sure no one in that class had come into reading Marx or at least analyzing it to the level that we did.
Doug Kirshen: Were you surprised to find that perspective on the Constitution told you things you didn't know about it? I mean, that's the idea, I suppose, of the lens paper.
Samuel Ackerman: Yeah. For me personally, I had a very strange high school experience. My English teacher was very [critical of] the Constitution. He did not like the Founding Fathers. ... So I come into the [UWS] already kind of had having that in the background. I had not made up my decision, or I haven't made my mind up on what I personally thought of the document. But I did have a counterpoint in mind, and definitely some of my old teacher's might have come from Marx or other like-minded philosophers.
Doug Kirshen: Jared, what were your expectations for this assignment? What were you hoping that students would do with it?
Jared Berkowitz: My vision for the assignment was really to challenge the assumptions that we have when we think about the Constitution, when we think about our founding documents. The primary text was a graphic novel that that gives an illustration of the Revolution and the framing of the Constitution, Constitutional Convention and all the rest of it. And then we had, there were two theoretical texts, two lenses that the students could choose from. One was Frederick Douglass: "What to the Slave Is the Fourth of July?" and the other one is The Communist Manifesto. Both lead us to dramatically different conclusions, one revealing a very hopeful, positive view of the Constitution, and the other one emphasizing the struggle and the problem of inequality in American history. And so what I wanted the students to do is look at that document, look at the Constitution, look at the graphic novel through the eyes of these two theorists. And then make an argument about whether the Constitution functions as something that supports the achievement of the American Dream or something that frustrates our path to achieving the American dream.
Doug Kirshen: Sam, what it was like to get started on this paper? Was it tough to get rolling or were you into it from the beginning?
Samuel Ackerman: It was a little rough at the beginning. I knew that I wanted to do Marx and not Frederick Douglass, only for the reason that I thought Douglass was, in the document given, not as comprehensive over the entirety of the Constitution as our primary text, the graphic novel. During my drafting phases, I was really thinking about using what Marx had to say about elections, and then I thought, there's so much more room to discuss things with Marx. But it was frustrating, trying to get started with Marx only because one I had not ever read this type of lliterature before, but because I had to learn a lot of the vocabulary. A lot of the concepts, such as autonomy, were new to me, and I had to do some outside research and reach out to a professor to really figure out what Marx is saying, so I don't get his words misconstrued.
Doug Kirshen: Can you tell us about your process? You wrote a draft and did a revision, went through the peer review. Anything jump out that was significant?
Damuel Ackerman: Well with other students, we had a peer review in class, but I always like people that know how I write to look at my and things too, because I know, for instance, if I ever give a piece of work to my father — we have very different ways of conveying the same ideas, and he will just try to [change] every single sentence. I remember in the peer review, at least in class, there was someone like that who kind of just saw my style. And he was very much like, oh you should say it this way. ... So I had to go outside and find someone who was okay with my style, more familiar with it, to really look and see if the substance was good. It's very hard to be a peer reviewing another person's work, especially if it's work that you don't agree with, which was very prevalent in that class.
Doug Kirshen: There was controversy in that class. That's a good thing. Jared, what did some of your students struggle with in this assignment, and what did some of your better results, like Sam's paper, do well?
Jared Berkowitz: The majority of the class chose to use Douglass to analyze the Constitution, and I think that was really the easier essay to write. Sam chose the more challenging one in going with Marx and wrestling with that really complicated theory. What most of the papers did was follow the standard assumptions about political equality and use Douglass's text as the perfect example of it, and and there's a really good argument to be made there. But what what I was really excited to see in Sam's paper was his ability to really look at this through the eyes of Marx and and take the theory seriously and take the process of lens analysis seriously. And just develop a really great analytical piece that's going to set aside the things that we think we know about the Constitution and look at it with fresh eyes. And be able to see the imperfections in these documents, and Marx helps us see that. That was one of the things I thought Sam's paper did really well. In addition to just having a really cogent argument, great supporting evidence, and all the standard pieces of good writing.
Doug Kirshen: Sam I have one last question for you. What would your advice be to next semester's UWS students coming in doing a lens paper? What would be one or two things that you would suggest to them?
Samuel Ackerman: So I'll give them a warning and then my advice to overcome it. The hardest thing for the lens essay is not imposing yourself within it. And I think that's what a majority of people struggle with. In this [case], I know that people specifically chose Frederick Douglass because they didn't want to disagree with the Constitution, and I know that some people chose Marx because they wanted to. It's very hard to remove yourself from the argument you're about to make. It's very unnatural. And so what I would do a lot of the times is write very short bits and I would leave it, because I know for a lot of people, if you just write and write and write, you tend to maybe deviate from your source or [even unintentionally] make things up. But with the lenses, you want to stay super strict with the source you're using and make sure that you never deviate. Because if you do, it can really bring up inconsistency in your argument ... So just try to remove your all of your personal attachments to whatever argument you're making, try to remove them completely, writing in short bursts, so that you don't try to impose them again. This is probably the most difficult paper we wrote, since it's so unconventional in that way. And so, the only advice, try to remove yourself, do those short bursts and just always keep always keep rereading the material you're working from.
Doug Kirshen: Good idea. Any last words from anybody, Jared, Sam?
Jared Berkowitz: Just one more piece of advice on the lenses, and that is just know the lens and know the theory cold, and do what Sam was talking about. This practice of scholarly objectivity is a big adjustment for first-year students, and the lens essay is a really good exercise to to work through that.
Doug Kirshen: Sam, Jared. Thank you very much for your time.